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Thanks John — this is really helpful. And to clarify script canon so it lands right:This is definitely stronger, Barry. One thing that might help sharpen it further is identifying the audience’s emotional point of entry.
Steven is clearly the source of the horror, but whose fear, guilt or helplessness are we experiencing as his story unfolds? If there’s one family member who carries that emotional perspective, bringing them forward in the pitch could give producers something more than the horror hook a character journey to attach to.
That might also help distinguish STEVEN from the films being used as comparisons.
October 15, 1968 - On a rainy night in a small town, Scott Hask delivers his own son in the backseat of his car. At the local hospital that same night, a deranged woman steals newborn Steven from the nursery. Cornered by staff, she does something horrible to him. The hospital covers it up. Linda senses something is wrong but is told everything is okay.
Seven years later, October 1975. Steven is six, silent, odd, and obsessed with fire. His mother has started drinking again. His father learns his chemical plant is closing before Christmas. His teenage sister is embarrassed to be seen with him. Even his two-year-old sister Heather screams when he comes near her. At school Steven is bullied as Creepy.
The same nurse who was there when Steven was born in 1968 looks into Steven's sealed file and tracks down Scott and Linda to whisper the truth. She reveals something bad. They dismiss her as crazy.
Until the County Fair, where a man who humiliates Steven at a haunted house ends up in a terrible situation.
With Halloween night approaching and his parents leaving his older sister in charge for trick-or-treating, Steven is left alone on the streets as something dark finally snaps.
A slow-burn 1970s small-town horror in the vein of John Carpenter's HALLOWEEN meets THE OMEN and CARRIE.
So emotional POV is Linda's gaslit dread in '68 becoming her teenage daughter's guilt on Halloween night — we feel the horror through the sister leaving him alone, not just through Steven as the source.
Does that give you that character journey to attach to beyond the hook? I'll leave the OP as v13.5 for today to avoid another bump.
Barry
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